Draft Commentary
The "Commuting" page has a simple layout, but it lacks most of the necessary content, making the project seem incomplete. The page only includes a title, links, and a table of contents (pages 1-2); the keyword entries, creative contributions, and curatorial reviews sections are all empty.
We suggest you add at least one paragraph explaining the significance of "commuting" as a keyword—how it shapes daily life or social structures—and your personal perspective on commuting. This will help visitors connect with the theme on a deeper level.
Adding images, data, or screenshots will also make the page more attractive and easier to understand. For example, including historical commute photos (like Peter Marlow’s 1996 London Bridge series) or modern transit data could illustrate how commuting has evolved.
The overall structure is complete, but now you need to refine the content so that the page effectively conveys your ideas. Focus on weaving together the functional (urban planning, transit systems) and emotional (strangers’ stories, daily rituals) aspects of commuting to create a holistic narrative.
By Cynthia Li
Cynthia Li
Curator | Project Evaluator
Draft Commentary
The "Commuting" page has a simple layout, but it lacks most of the necessary content, making the project seem incomplete. The page only includes a title, links, and a table of contents (pages 1-2); the keyword entries, creative contributions, and curatorial reviews sections are all empty.
We suggest you add at least one paragraph explaining the significance of "commuting" as a keyword—how it shapes daily life or social structures—and your personal perspective on commuting. This will help visitors connect with the theme on a deeper level.
Adding images, data, or screenshots will also make the page more attractive and easier to understand. For example, including historical commute photos (like Peter Marlow’s 1996 London Bridge series) or modern transit data could illustrate how commuting has evolved.
The overall structure is complete, but now you need to refine the content so that the page effectively conveys your ideas. Focus on weaving together the functional (urban planning, transit systems) and emotional (strangers’ stories, daily rituals) aspects of commuting to create a holistic narrative.
By Cynthia Li
Priority Recommendations